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Bartc

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Hi Guys, 
One of my trails[smile] Hope you guys could give me some tips on how to improve this one [wink]

Thx in advance


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Nice work. i love the lighting coming through the window, i am doing a similar thing with a warehouse conversion render i am working on. Maybe try adding fire into the fireplace? maybe a wall mounted light fixture to give some depth to the back corner? loverly work though mate. [thumb]
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Thx mate [smile]

I have made some adjustments based on your feedback. 

I have also changed the material of the wall in the back to masonry, hoping this will bring some more depth to the image. And added some more random stuff (like sockets.etc ) 



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Hey that's a great start! My tip would be to use a lower point of view and point the camera a bit upwards. This should give a better sense of space. 

I think you also need some work on that fireplace [smile]

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I like the natural lighting, but not so keen on the general interior design.

The style and colours seem to clash, oriental with a old style rug, modern timber flooring, different timber staining etc...

The texture on the fire place is not good, you need to find a better one and watch how you position the texture.

With a bit more work it could be really good.

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Hi Nat, 

Thx for the feedback [smile]

I will try to get some more uniformity by changing the materials.

I will also change the fireplace and repost the result. 

Thx again 

  

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Also thx to u for for feedback Nick [wink] 
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Basically this is a good render!

The texture on the beams doesn't work particularly well though. That black-stained timber is not the best. It would be so much better with a lighter, weathered rough timber texture.

Also, as Nick has said, that fireplace just won't work. Think about how you would support all that stone. The usual solution is steel, but I don't know how you would support all that stone on a simple cantilevered steel support...

The camera angle needs to be lowered. You should always put the camera at eye level, unless you want a more creative shot. The standing-on-a-ladder angle almost never works well.

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thx  for the feedback bigstick [wink] 

I was already busy adapting (was trying to make the fireplace more like the picture attached ) but i think i will have to look for something completely else after all the remarks [tongue]

i will do my best to change the render based on all this helpfull feedback and post the result later [smile]





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That's a completely different style of construction. It would a much lighter weight partition type construction, but the steel support could be concealed behind the timber.

Also - it's a render, and not a particularly great one [wink]

It's not bad at all, but it's over-lit, and that fire isn't very convincing. It looks like a burning loaf of bread, or worse...

In many ways, your renders are better [smile]

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thx for the compliment [smile] 

I have been changing texture's, angle, and furniture.

but have been playing around with it for so long i can't actually see if i made it better or worse [tongue] 

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Yeah - you're just playing around without much direction [biggrin]
The basic render is good, you're just not that good at decision-making by the looks of it!


Here you go:

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I am enjoying watching the learning process here. Thanks for putting yourself out here for critique.

The decoration of the space will be key for you to turn this into something great.
Decorating is not instinctive for everybody. I would recommend cheating until you develop your own vibe.

Google something like "loft living" and find images that speak to you and try to emulate the style.

Also try to think of yourself using this space and make it work for how you would use it.

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Hey Guys [smile]

@bigstick: thank you very much (again) for all this useful feedback, now that you point those things out to me it seems so obvious. 

@pmolson: Decorating the place feels like the hardest part for me indeed. Thx for the tip.I started putting some mood boards together with photoshop and making some inspiration boards on pinterest. Actually texturing is also not that great for now, so i have some work on that to [tongue] Found a book in a second hand bookstore about digital texturing and learning to dissect materials in real life, so i hope this also helps[smile]

As for putting myself out here, i think constructive criticism is the best way to improve and i am thankful for all the comments.  [wink]

cheers

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